Punctuation is important

It's hilarious...
"An amazing story. The sentences go from long to short. A lovely use of comma's and some of the most refreshing full stops I've ever seen." Leon Gower (authonomy)
Seriously, in good poetry, punctuation is so important.
Watch this clip from the movie 'Wit', talking about John Donne's 'Death be not proud', my favourite piece of poetry, I've gotta say.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GS-m0UAB3uQ

1st comments on 3rd book

Got my 1st real comment about 'The Rage of Atlantis' today. Here it is...

"It's a Flash Gordon meets water-world, action packed and fast paced story. You could improve it further with more descriptions and an edit to make it even sharper but nothing too radical needed. If it's aimed at the young adult market then I think you have pretty much nailed it." Karen K(authonomy)

I don't know about descriptions, I like the reader to imagine what things look like, to give them room to breathe.
...and while waiting to see whether my daughter had broken her ankle or not, I wrote up the 'skeleton' storyline of the rest of the book. Will be tricky to write but well worth the journey.
Hang on a minute...a 2nd comment!


"Reading your work I can't help but think of a comic book. (and i love comic books) Have you considered teaming up with an artist who needs a solid script and story line? This could make for an excellent series. you've got a good idea and clear vision. Heck I'd buy it." Leon Gower (authonomy)


You see? There are some people out there who can see it. It's so fantastic to know that my writing can get through, that people can see what I'm trying to do here. Hope you do too :-)

First 10,000 words of 3rd book

The first 10,000 words are up to read from my 3rd book 'The Rage of Atlantis'.
Please have a read and tell me what you think, on the site, here, by my own website, whatever :-)
The best quotes will actually go on the back cover of book :-)
Hope you enjoy it.

http://authonomy.com/books/44130/the-rage-of-atlantis/

A treat...small part of 3rd book

A treat for the 700th view! Here's most of Part 13, about 5000 words into my new unfinished 3rd book, 'The Rage of Atlantis', with God talking to his personal secretary, Audrey.

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God had noticed. And he’d seen that Gabriel hadn’t. Or at least he hadn’t mentioned it. There was a drop, just a slight one, but enough for him to feel it. It hadn’t affected business yet, but if it continued in this manner, then questions would be asked, heads would roll, namely his.

“Audrey?” He clicked through to his personal assistant.

“Yes, sir?”

“Can you switch me through to Main Records, and put it through to my screen?”

“Of course, sir.” It was easier to ask her to do it. There was a certain protocol to run through, and he didn’t wish anyone to know that he was querying something. Tongues might wag. “There you go, sir.”

“Thanks, Audrey.” He already knew that figures were down, there were less souls coming through ‘up above’ in the last few years than before, but only Main Records had other information that was crucial to investigating why. All he had was a list of names and times which he handed to Gabriel to deal with. He knew it wasn’t Gabriel, he was such an industrious fellow.

Looking through the records, it took him only five minutes to see something, something which kept cropping up. “Audrey?”

“Yes, sir?”

“There’s a cause of death here which isn’t familiar to me.”

“What’s that then, sir?”

“Well, there’s heart attacks, strokes, cancer, accidents, toilet seats, the usual, but there’s something else I’ve never come across before.”

“And what’s that then, sir?” Audrey had to deal with God on a daily basis, sometimes it was tiring.

“What’s ‘terrorism’?”

“It’s not familiar, sir…but...hang on, I did hear it’s got something to do with another monkey trait called ‘Polysticks’.”

“Polly sticks? Oh, you mean Politics.” Abstract nouns were still difficult for God. Connecting words to objects was fine now, but words connected to nothing but an idea, that was hard.

“Yes, sir, maybe that’s the one. Yes, yes, I think so.”

“Mmm, Politics.” God thought for a definition. ”The destruction of freedom, enforcing power over selected targets of unnamed masses, profitable only to a chosen few. What has Politics got to do with this ‘terrorism’?”

“I think it’s about death, sir.”

“Well, it has to be. It’s in black and white here on the screen. It’s a cause of death.”

“Yes, sir.”....(continued in the book...authonomy.com...when there's 10,000+ words)
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On the right track

Completely rewrote the first 3000 words of 'Rage'. It's starting to make sense now, with the dolphin as a sidekick. Have a look if you can. It gives it a lot more scope.
http://jottify.com/works/the-rage-of-atlantis/

Prices down!

Well, the day has come!
I've put the prices down on my printed versions to rock-bottom :-)
The sole/soul purpose of a book is to be read, and this is the best I can do to make my books available to all at the cheapest price possible.
Man by a tree - $6.95 - https://www.createspace.com/3731273
The Bethlehem Fiasco - $7.50  - https://www.createspace.com/3783797
If the eStore system isn't good for you, there's always Amazon.com, but they're the reason why the books can't be any cheaper, they take so much money that I make a few cents on a sale. But the point is to get the message across, not make money :-)

Interview soon online

I've just finished answering some questions from a website interested in my 2nd book. They were pretty good questions, I hope the answers were good too. Don't know when the interview will be online, but apparently that website gets 1000 hits a day from the USA, UK and Hungary! This could be a break...I'm not getting anywhere near that many hits here or on my own website...
Still thinking about the dolphin...
...and I'd just like to say hi to Teressa in Cyclone, Pennsylvania :-)