Five more days until Gubacsi Dulu is #FREE...
Today... erm... Yeah, I know! Dialogue!
Don't you just love those books on Amazon, over 200 5 star reviews, you 'Look Inside' to see what the fuss is all about and find either pages and pages of description of the world/characters, what I would call 'info dump', or some of the worst, unreal dialogue you've ever seen in your life. The best is when the characters laugh and you're thinking 'What are they laughing about? No one said anything funny and nothing funny happened... except for the dreadful dialogue.'
Let's try and find an example.... nah, I don't want to embarrass someone who has more reviews (and power) than myself. "If you have nothing good to say, don't say anything at all"... "Trump is a huge POS... it's good to say."
So I've always tried to keep my dialogue as real - and believable - as possible. A little excerpt from Chapter 9...
“A
what did what? Are implants a thing now?” Karina couldn’t believe it, didn’t
want to. What did they do? What were they good for? Did it hurt?
“For
the wealthy. You should read more of the updates we receive from Base.”
“We
receive updates from Base?” Even this was news to her.
“You
look like shit.”
“Call
the kettle black, would ya?”
“Go
get some sleep!” Pukanszky pushed her out of the casino and waved her away. “And
have a shower, too!”
This kind of thing. Nothing special, just real. That's what I do with dialogue. As you can see, there's even a little bit of 'world-creation' in there, but with no information dump. The reader needs to use their own knowledge and expectations to fill in the gaps with their imagination. What updates? What Base? Apparently Karina looks and smells terrible. That kind of thing. ...you'll find out about implants if you read the book.
...and there's some movement on Amazon.co.uk (Paperback!)... thanks Mum! (LOL) ...no, really... probably... Ha!
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